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athousandmiles
Lauren Campbell
United Kingdom, Scotland, Glasgow

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Maybe You're Right

That morning, when you asked me to leave, you told me I could never love anyone else, that I was too in love with myself, but how could that be the case when I loved you more than I could say, and maybe I'm just searching for something to make me whole, but how else am I supposed to grow, and I can understand why you left, you didn't want to clean up my mess, and why would you, when I'm falling apart, why would you when I broke your heart, but God, I love you, I always will, but perhaps I just need a new thrill, and I couldn't love myself when I was with you, couldn't be the person you wanted me to, and maybe it was time for me to break free, or maybe the fact is that I'm just me, that maybe I can never love anyone else, because I'm too in love with myself.

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raynefyre Comment by: raynefyre - 2006-12-07 06:28
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Yeah, I love the style and the way everything is expressed. Weird about the song lol. I can relate to needing to say something and just rushing it all out. Never really tried it before in the writing area...

Maybe something to think about. Inspiring lol
athousandmiles Comment by: athousandmiles - 2006-12-07 05:54
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I'm happy you understood the style. I got really caught up in the moment when I was writing this. :)
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-12-06 09:20
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The long run-on style here really works, like you're saying everything in one breath, because if you stop, you may never finish saying what you need to.
athousandmiles Comment by: athousandmiles - 2006-12-02 06:12
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Haha awesome. I love Sarah.
jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2006-12-02 04:37
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before you love anyone else
you have to love yourself
you cant be too much in love with yourself

you know what i liked about this poem too?
i just bought the sarah mclachlan mirrorball cd
and the lyrics of her songs
were written in exactly the same way you wrote this poem
and lauren i was stopped in my tracks
at seeing those lyrics written in that way
same with your poem
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