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Down, down
Down down falls the Angel to the black pits of Hell.
Battered and buffeted by fierce stormy winds
Bruised clear to her soul, hiding deep in her shell
There is no way out, it is here her life ends
What a solitary walk this Angel takes now
She must find her lone way thru this dark evil night
She is lost on this path and doesn't know how
In this rutted bleak canyon to find any light
There is no helping hand, love has turned its back
Steeped in her misery she knows she must face
Being humbled and chained; there will be no lack
Of those who pursue in this damnable race
Her wings are now damaged, feathers roughly torn out
Gone is the grace and the love held within
Bars of iron rise around her, she is strangled by doubt
Of all in the world it seems only she sinned
Now an Angel no more, she's downtrodden and dirty
With much fear in her heart whether she can survive
Is there no one left now who might find her worthy?
Is there no one at all who will help her to fly?
How sweet was this Angel when in heaven she flew
How golden her visage and perfect her form
How can she come back to be what we knew
How can she ever weather this storm?
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| Thank you Sasha, it was a long and unrelenting road of her own choosing, addiction takes even angels. |
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| I like your ending, I didn't expect it to turn out this way. one would never expect an angel to be lost or alone or simply battered. "Is there no one left now who might find her worthy?Is there no one at all who will help her to fly?" Powerful lines. A common cliche was resounding in my head as I read the last stanza. when your on top you have loads of friends, when you fall from grace where is everyone?My question to you is, how and why did she fall? Powerful imagery, love the inconclusive ending. Great work, Sasha |
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| Thank you both so much for your comments. MMutami, I don't know why that theme reoccurs so much. I have experienced rejection much like everyone else but maybe I am drawn to those who have had the same issues. This poem is about a dear friend who is not doing well at all and faces what may be her last chance to begin anew. I simply write from my heart and this is truly what I feel about her. |
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Comment by: MMutami - 2007-01-13 05:38
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| Praises shower during one's very good days. When fortune seems to have departed not even a stray comment of good old days caresses the victim's ear. Lady, you have strong command of the language. The images you create easily impact on the readers' feelings. I am touched.I just pray that I will to resemble that ill-fated Angel. Tell me something, why is the theme of rejection and being deserted so strong in your work? You handle it so skillfully. Is there a secret, only if am allowed to know. Am just a spoiled inquisitive kid. I like your poetry. |
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Comment by: Sophia Online- 2007-01-11 05:21
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How can she come back to be what we knew
How can she ever weather this storm?
very sad a sweet ending. Good as always! |
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