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yorkshireman
john sunderland
United States

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This son of mine

tall and thin like a pencil
whiskered baby
eats pop tarts
as the cartoons chase
on the children's channel

its cold outside
the first flakes
surprised to be here
hurry along down the street
my hands are cold

Where's he going today
this son of mine
from across the sea
On the ferry dad to
meet Liberty

You'll be cold
I said
wear a sweater
wear a coat
the mirror won he won't

Oh the want and the not want
to be the parent again
to guide advize
love and chide
call inside

and yet he and her
on the ferry
sail on the open gate to the sea
to meet liberty
without me

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Cherley Comment by: Cherley - 2006-12-28 15:29
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Yes, you captured the young man with the mirror part. LOL. It's so hard to let go.
Jamilah Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-12-05 21:30
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I love your expressiveness of this poem. "The mirror won he won't." You say so much with so few words in a work which touches the surface and also goes far beyond. And as the mother of grown boys, I know exactly what you mean.

Excellent work.
youngace17 Comment by: youngace17 - 2006-12-05 11:05
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Wow. W-O-W.
I feel like I was actually there, the child on the ferry. My father would be so excited to see a poem like this. I'm sure he felt that way when I left to live with my mother. So this poem is a little close to home. Good job!
JohnnySodoff Comment by: JohnnySodoff - 2006-12-04 10:58
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Great piece, I feel like a father just reading it.

I really like the fourth stanza about the coat and the mirror. Something I probably would've done a couple years ago. Too cool for school and all. Anyways, this reads great. YES!
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