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james c bernthal
James C. Bernthal
United Kingdom, Norfolk, Norfolk

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Rags

Under a granite slab
(There is still holy space),
Is a rotting dress,
That once emitted grace.
I long to reach that dress.

Not one very like it
(They settle well on land);
Not another dress.
Beneath the slab, my hand
Is reaching for that dress.

A Lady grieves as well
(Her grief theatrical).
She cries for her dress
And holy space is full.
So she forgets that dress.

I picture her no more
(For she is fading, too),
Nor the banished dress.
Its spirit rises, blue.
We will forget that dress

(If we want to or not).
She's just a girl - she stares.
"What was a white dress?"
Nothing. Gone. Perished soul.
I still want to grab it.

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Comment by: - 2007-01-15 07:34
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I love these last lines, "Nothing. Gone. Perished soul.
I still want to grab it."
Cherley Comment by: Cherley - 2007-01-13 13:08
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I thought that it was a special dress that someone was buried in. But then when I came to the white part, I thought it was a lost love. Maybe she was left at the altar.
Sophia Comment by: Sophia Online- 2007-01-05 08:58
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Well written and evocative. I find it sad though to think of someone as 'fading' or of the 'dress' rotting because of a loss of virtue (virtue can mean so many different things). I would hope the lady still has grace.
james c bernthal Comment by: james c bernthal - 2007-01-02 11:34
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The inspiration for this poem was the decline of virtuous ladies. Does that help?

:)
ShatteredDreamer Comment by: ShatteredDreamer - 2007-01-02 04:38
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Am completely stumped, but I liked this piece. What's the background/inspiration for this?
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