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| metal fatigues, but hey, people used to burn bridges. |
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| So few word and so much said |
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| This is excellent stuff, concise and powerfull. My reading of this is never look back, and that going back is not as safe as it seems. |
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| This reminds me a lot of a haiku. Short and sweet...well depending on subject matter. I LIKED IT! Sorry, I should probably be asleep and I just wanted to sound like a douchey idiot for a second. Now I must compare this to a haiku, as there are obvious similarities. Where a haiku leaves you soaring like some long-tailed bird over a waterfall, this poem ends kind of like a piece of metal hitting the bottom of a bathtub. While this isnt necesarily bad, it does leave me to think. Either, that is the intended response or the end line "The bridge isn't safe" is a little too literal. |
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| so short but with so much though and creativity. With only a few sentences made it come to life. Beautiful. Thank you |
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