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Judy K
United States, ME, Belfast

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Aunt Ethel

Lank hair that slips
easily behind protruding ears,
a jaw as square and boney
as spent horseshoes,
she's long ago given up
eating sensible in an effort
to keep herself thin.

Mornings, she slips
into boots, pulls the shovel
from where it hangs on the wall,
clears blocks of snow from the walk,
brews tea made of yarrow
and mountain mint.

She stretches low, touching
her toes to keep her back
from going out, tries a few
half yoga moves, the lion,
the cat, the duck, animal names
she makes up on the spot
for half-forgotten poses.

Last year she gave up
driving, sold the old Buick
to Elmer for too little cash.
Not much use, she couldn't
see at night, thought a curve
looked like the shadow of a tree,
a mailbox like a deer about to bolt,

and days she drove near off the road,
the jacked up trucks clattering gravel
as they passed. Sometimes she gave them
the finger, just to see if they'd
let up a little on the gas.

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Jamilah Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-12-07 19:38
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"Aunt Ethel" is just how I pictured her when I read the title. I love your description. She feels very real. And I can relate to your passages about night driving.
jkaber Comment by: jkaber - 2006-12-07 15:45
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Teri & Digs- Thanks for you support.
Hmm. I don't think I'm much good with stories, but maybe I'll let Aunt Ethel have a fling at one. Teri, though I too have an Aunt Ethel, this is a made up lady. She's not really all that sweet.
digs Comment by: digs Online- 2006-12-07 08:44
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Loved this. Teriā??s right about writing Ethel into a story. Too many good bits to pick out one or two. A brilliant portrait. The title hooks you in.
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2006-12-06 17:55
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This is sweet! I have an Aunt Ethel, too, so this caught my eye, and I'm so glad I read it. I could picture her so well. You've done a wonderful job, and I'd love to see you take this character, flesh her out a little more, and WRITE HER INTO A SHORT STORY. *hints* It would be sooooo good, Judy, coming from your pen. Thanks for sharing your Aunt Ethel with me. :)

Teri xox
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