writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
PsycheInASkirt
Jessie LaBarbera
United States, New York, Purchase

Words: 318
Access: Public
Comments: 4

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




1400 Miles Near

I smear black paint below my eyes
I am ready for this war
Following the path of self-inflicted scars
I work my way up to your shoulder
And go in for the kill
My tongue tracing your pores
And inevitable sunburn
You counter.. and lift a shield of glass
To stop me in my path
Unexpected
I retreat to the comfort of my head
Resting softly in two feminine hands
You touch one
Opening it up, revealing sweaty palms
You trace the lines
And my organs shake and rattle
You say, that line there
That line means I want
And I see white flags raise in your eyes
I knew I could win
So breathe in the carbon monoxide air
And swallow the taste of ash and tar in my spit
You wanna try?
Yes, yes. I am like you
I want the blackness in your lungs to drip into mine
So I can be pure like you
So you lean in and I rise to meet you
Mimes with violins play our symphony
By your window, so sweet
They were waiting with a victory song
Your poison kiss shoots adrenaline into my eyelashes
You own me


I leave with tears running down
My face, and arms, and legs
I sit against walls and lean on buildings
Waiting for any strength to return
You say "Hey come back here you've forgotten something"
"What?"
"Me."
I run to you and jump
Legs wrapped around you, kisses pounding hard on our bodies
We fall into the grass
The Mississippi river drowns every fear
Show me Venus
Show me Jupiter
Show me anything
Before I must walk away for good
And I do, my legs wobbling
Your face twisted
I must leave

I scream at my phone
In an motel room in Tennessee
I stamp my feet and bang my head and scratch my skin
Miles never felt like knives before

Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
maggie m Comment by: maggie m - 2006-12-08 13:04
Add to Readers
      
"Darkness in love with being in love...but mimes don't speak"
Nice work here!
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-12-08 06:22
Add to Readers
      
I love it when a poem can tell a story well. You seem to have portrayed both pain and guilty pleasure in this piece and the flow was pretty well metered all the way through.

An interesting and good write.**
Comment by: - 2006-12-08 04:49
Add to Readers
      
Very cool and raw- I was into this until "mimes and violins" phrase intruded, struck me as genteel and out of context. I smelled sweat and earth and heard thunder- IOW was seeing "Braveheart" and the channel changed to an edwardian script. Thats all I'd suggest tinkering with. The violin symphony music sounding too polite and gifted for the rest of your very original exciting voice.
DaveyBoyGreen Comment by: DaveyBoyGreen - 2006-12-08 04:00
Add to Readers
      
Hi
I read both your uploads - they are well written. I felt an overwhelming feeling of despair, sadness etc....in both.

David
1

Sponsored Ads


By PsycheInASkirt

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S