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Erik Duarte
United States, IL, Chicago

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"The Absolution of Abe the Flame"

Abe was a boy who set a raging blaze with a single touch of his finger

Up to the current day, Abe was always considered a walking pariah

For Abe, a casual walk down the town streets would easily leave one blanched in horror

An unfortunate turnout for a boy who had the heart of an angel

One winter, he went as far as to use his own body as a means of heat

For a family of ogres who were in desperate need of warmth in order to survive

For a boy with a heart as big as the town itself he had a rather strange job

His body was used for cremating the bodies of those who passed in the town

As they didn't believe in the earthly tradition of proper burial

He was unlike any other boy or girl that lived in the murky town of Eastville

It is said that this town is where every dark fairy tale ever concocted resides

On occasion you could spot Bob the Leper at the local market

You could find him stocking up for his annual town barbeque

Bob was the town's self proclaimed mayor and not to mention, a great cook

He could cook up anything your watering taste buds would desire

A total master of his art, but unfortunately the same couldn't be said about his personality

He was a total scrooge when it came to anything that didn't involve personal gain

One winter he was responsible for kicking out hundreds of families out of their own shelter

To use the lumber of their cabins as a burning source of heat for himself

You also could catch little old Wanda the Werewolf at the local Tumble N' Toss Laundromat

Aside from running a homeless shelter for those who were forsaken by Bob the Leper

Wanda ran the Laundromat on a daily basis and was practically the only soul

To always notice Abe during one of his daily walks and say hello

Abe was the only boy in town who was entirely engulfed in flames

From head to toe, it made it hard for him to make friends at all

For Wanda to even acknowledge his existence was enough for Abe

One night while taking a stroll down the street he noticed something

It was something that played like a tune from the heavens to his ears

It was a girl's voice that streamed through the air like a silk ribbon riding the wind

It was the voice of Gail the Grizzly Bear that struck a chord in his heart

He suddenly found himself captivated by the beauty of her chant

Gail was the kind of girl grizzly that was timid, but had a hell of a temper

The fact that she was abused as a young cub sideshow for the town circus

Didn't help her temper any as she grew older

That night Gail lay awake indulging in a thought, a wish

The wish that someday she might meet her other half

Like in the land of beautiful fairy tales where prince charming

Rides through the night fighting off evil, to take his princess away from its' clutch

Before careful for what you wish for

He followed the girl's voice to the window of her room

Through the blinds of her window she notices his burning glow

She screams in terror but to no avail as her parents lie fast asleep

Abe is stricken by immediate panic and signals her to quite down

The simple wave of his arms causes a small fire to the side of the house

In an instant, the fire spreads to the rest of the house causing uproar in town

Wanda the Werewolf takes notice from her home and paces to the scene

In a bitter attempt to save Gail and her family, Abe breaks into their home

Not realizing that the situation would only worsen, he scurries along

Wanda makes her way through the crowd of onlookers and takes a deep breath

She blows out the hardest gust of air from her aged lungs and attempts to put the fire out

In her attempt, Abe is blown out of a window and into a tree

Gail makes it out alive but unfortunately her parents perish in the fire

Reality hits Gail like a hammer to the face when she realizes the consequences

In a rage of denial she brutally attacks anyone in her path

Wanda tries to pacify the angry grizzly but is mauled and eaten in the process

Gail runs off to a cliff that leads down to a river near by, as Abe follows in a dash

The locals looking to avenge Wanda's death cut both Abe and Gail off at the cliff

With no where else to turn Abe expresses that it was accidental and he meant no harm

He exclaims that all he ever wanted was to be loved and jumps off to his death

The locals move in towards Gail, she lets out a loud roar and tries to fight them off

They proved to be too much for her and beat her with sticks and stones

The next morning Gail awakes in a pit of charcoal and finds herself drenched in lighter fluid

"Good morning sunshine, you didn't think you'd get away now did you?" Said Bob

"I've got to thank your pal Abe for making it possible for you to join us!"

"Oh and welcome to Bob the Leper's Annual BBQ, we're glad you made it for breakfast!"

:: Lights a match and throws it in the pit. ::

[Scene]

© Erik Duarte 2006

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NaturalDisaster Comment by: NaturalDisaster - 2008-10-22 20:34
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This is my third time signing up for EditRed and I only did it cause I wanted to tell you so badly that this is by far my favorite of your postings. I do believe you will be a great writer one day. You just gotta beat the distractions. I loved the characters and became emotional for Abe. I felt like I could actually relate to the poor hopless romantic. He only tried to help, but it only made things worse. Sometimes I guess it's best to just love someone from afar, that way no one gets hurt.
theorionfive Comment by: theorionfive - 2007-12-03 05:36
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It has that sort of fantasy-meets-the real world kind of flavor to it. I do agree with some of the reviewers here that this is actually going nowhere, but that's what makes it so fun!
lovesponge03 Comment by: lovesponge03 - 2007-04-15 20:41
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nice. (sometimes the simplest words are the best for describing such awesome pieces of bullshit.)
clariann Comment by: clariann - 2007-03-17 14:34
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I was expecting a dark fairy tale but this twisted into something else far more grusome where the characters are introduced to the characters moments before they meet their ends. I liked your style of writing that makes the reader sit up and pay attention as anything could happen.
Nana Comment by: Nana - 2006-12-17 11:06
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I am speechless. This is one of those stories that stay in your mind the whole day and follow you to your sleep; one of those stories that are made into legends from long ago and never lose its shocking effect. I enjoyed the simplicity and the free style in which you wrote it. Once again, thanks for a great read!
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