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Erik Duarte
United States, IL, Chicago

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"Bad Trip Boulevard"

Last night I shot the sky in all its' glory
To watch it bleed a river inside my mouth
I then began to choke and a burst of laughter let out
In hindsight I was aiming for the vultures
That circled above my every move
I bet they could taste my carrion a mile away
I paraded the streets of gold
With the devil dolled up in a mask
We danced the night away like children
He says he usually takes the lead
So we blast away everything in sight with my new 45
Creating a crimson display of confetti and mayhem
Dirty Harry never felt this good
I snort a trail of cocaine that led up to the moon
I cross my heart and hope to die
Said the billboard on bad trip boulevard
I encounter my reflection
In a puddle of my own piss
He challenges me to a duel
Russian roulette was his poison

© Erik Duarte 2006

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Loloix Comment by: Loloix - 2007-11-19 05:23
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i wish i had a good command in english.. that's your edge...
good writing... the image is clear.. and diction
Aria Comment by: Aria - 2007-07-21 21:50
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imagery is amazing. this is not something for the faint of heart. you are a raw and passionate writer. this piece is very scary in the best possible way.
emmajones Comment by: emmajones - 2007-04-01 07:44
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Sounds like a good night... Very atmospheric, loved the imagery you created. A bad trip or real - keeps you guessing.
Grounded Vertigo Comment by: Grounded Vertigo - 2007-03-19 01:51
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You have a real gift for language which is shown in the piece, your words just jump of the page and create strong images in the mind of the reader.
clariann Comment by: clariann - 2007-03-15 09:22
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There are some amazing images in here although my favourite line is 'Dirty Harry never felt this good', love the title as well.
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