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Erik Duarte
United States, IL, Chicago

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"Peril In The Ninth"

It's the bottom of the ninth, and the bases are loaded with hardship in the lead by 1. A packed house tonight, on this cold and unforgiving Thursday complete with dark eruptive skies. Each seat filled with everything from the blinding glare of a photographer's camera to the deafening bark of a dedicated fan. Seems more like a slaughter house than a sports event if you ask me. With tension as thin as a blade, it certainly feels that way. Prosperity is up to bat with a game face ready for war and not only the weight of the world on his back, but with a chance to take this game out of peril. The question is CAN HE DO IT FOLKS? Hardship throws a devastating curve to home. All eyes are drawn on the batter's final swing as it pierces through the air with every last ounce of strength and misses the curvaceous throw of victory.

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Nana Comment by: Nana - 2006-12-13 07:27
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You have this great talent of making us visualize what you're saying through your descriptions. I have to say I loved this piece, especially the end. You build on that suspense and then, unexpectedly, reveal that perilous ending.
(I love baseball, by the way!!)
Great piece!
Euripides Comment by: Euripides - 2006-12-12 07:39
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dead on!
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