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Comment by: LadyC - 2006-05-07 10:25
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| It was good, I can practically smell the coffee! |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-11 15:47
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| yup loved this too...makes me wanna go to land of java... |
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| Enjoyed the poem, reminded me of some of my own work, in fact, which doesn't happen all that often. I like the use of the "public area" to convey personal feelings in all poetry as well as yours, and you use that to good effect here. By placing the narrator as a passive voyeur we learn more about them as we do about the snippets of characters that pass by. A tricky and interesting technique that you seem to pull off with ease. |
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Comment by: cinders - 2005-11-30 20:41
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I actually wrote this when I was a senior in high school (think 98) and just discovering my love for writing poetry and wanted to sort of get into the "scene" (anticipating college) but felt not hip enough and intimidated.
And now I just went and ruined it all for you. |
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Comment by: please - 2005-11-21 19:16
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| well that sure is the city life and something that I'd never want to experience, though I must say that a greater number of people are turning this way which is sometimes a bad feeling that comes in with it when you think about it but I thought your poem was like a mirror image of what it is actually like! |
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