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Comment by: jesscat - 2007-06-06 22:55
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I like it, it just sort of rolls off the tongue.
only suggestion- personally I would add another "the world goes on" before "the world goes..." |
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Comment by: sudipal - 2007-04-29 15:39
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| Love the repetition. I feel the poem is still going on. |
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| I agree with Pandora. You incorporated repitition expertly in this poem. It fits well with the subject. |
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Comment by: mitra - 2006-12-10 03:20
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| hmmm.. like it. Its true. |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-12-09 21:20
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| I really enjoyed this. It is hard to pull off a good poem with repetition but you did it very well. The subject matter is also true...no matter what happens in our everyday lives..."live goes on."** |
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