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Laura Watson
United Kingdom, Newcastle

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Facades, Lies and what Love really is...

With every look I sicken,
With each touch I die,
With every kiss my sadness rages,
Without your love I'll never fly'¦

I know that you love me,
I know it deep inside'¦
I feel it in your heartbeat,
When you hold me in your arms.

But she has you
She loves you too; it's clear to see
And so I watch, I wait,
I pine, I perish'¦

From your heart to mine,
I feel the trust, the respect.
Something she'll never have,
And yet'¦ without trust there can be no love'¦

Do you love her?
Are you in love with her?
Or is this some personal challenge?
Sprung from you pride? Your inability to fail?

In this life, patience is the truest virtue'¦
But honesty, the hardest'¦
'How can you not feel something,
For someone who looks at you like that?'

She loves you with every fibre of her being,
You 'care' for her?
I hate to see her in pain,
I'll never know why'¦

But I know that she is hurting.
You elate her, you charm her,
She never wants to leave you'¦
But you 'care' for her'¦

Do you believe that hearing that from you,
Wouldn't kill her?
Every woman deserves to be adored,
And you 'care' for her?

What is this faƧade of a relationship even for?

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CK Gage Comment by: CK Gage - 2008-04-22 16:02
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Beautiful. Memories from years ago, you brought them all to me today.
Juanita Comment by: Juanita - 2007-11-07 07:59
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You did a wonderful job of capturing the confusion and heartache that comes with being caught in the middle of a love triangle. I agree that this was very well written. I enjoyed reading it, nice job!
dlynn Comment by: dlynn - 2007-09-14 14:53
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Your writing is phenomenal! At age 16, I would hope you had not gone through
such pain. I can see I am amidsed excellent writers here! Keep up the good
work!
Diane
Elucidate Comment by: Elucidate - 2007-06-27 20:10
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very good, so much insight for such a young person!!(hey, i'm only 17 myself=P) relationships are tough, and this poem discribes exactly that
MarinaCityMayhem Comment by: MarinaCityMayhem - 2007-06-22 12:58
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What a fantastic and well-written poem. I found it hard to believe that the author was only 16! There's a great deal of insight into this piece and it evoked a wide range of emotions. Very well done!
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