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CrimsonShad0w
Rudy Morgan
United States, florida, havana

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The sway (that fire consumes)

A cigarette resting between her lips
seems to sway with such intents
as if to nestle deeper in
in search to touch the subtle skin
unto the tongue with such desire
that it might light us like a fire
a sweet tooth of more sinister birth
a treatful season with such a worth

and like a child, unto the door
I beg for sweets that I adore
and battle with that cigarette
for favor from whence it has set
my own lips may now find
it's own way to sway so inclined
and nestle myself there deeper still
upon your tongue a place to fill
my name to not roll as if a game
my touch to linger until it would tame
and ever ride upon your breath
to nestle closely upon your chest
a passion to continuously swell
until we sway again to fill
and meet like that lit cigarette
where one may sin yet not regret
and sway and pray for deeper still
our voices one with us until
no pleasures' left to be undone
that we may rest once more so sweet, upon your tongue.

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CrimsonShad0w Comment by: CrimsonShad0w - 2007-02-18 23:50
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thanks for reading, and no it isn't a mistake, I don't mind doing so every now and then, i don't think in the overall it harms a poem to any extreme degree, if done subtley enough anyways; or perhaps you disagree? ;)
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2007-02-18 10:57
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A very lovely worded poem. The cadence flowed. It seems to me
that the poem is one sentence long. Nice use of enjambment.
Keep writing.

Oops! a typo? Verse 1, lines 3 and 4 - you ended line 3 with "in" and began line 4 with "in." Was this deliberate?
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-12-14 18:31
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This was hot.

I loved the words you used to describe the passion that builds through out the poem.

Very much enjoyed.**
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