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antonanon
Anthony Dunkley
India, Goa, Margao

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It's 4 am. The crows have begun their morning lament; the roosters will grab the baton soon. The water is dribbling from the tap at the crossroad. And underneath an orange plastic bucket collects its meagre dose for a family of six. It will have to last the day.

The line of buckets begins the evening before, as those that finish their water first seek a refill. There is very little extra, and there is but a small damp patch of waste in the red earth. An occasional car passes and kicks up the dust. It leaves a film on the waters surface. This terra cotta will permeate everything. All whites become pink, and then get darker every time they are washed.

Still the water drips, and dark skinned women in brightly coloured sari's squat and chat together as they watch the dribble bring them closer to their return home, to a smoky fire and the cooking pot.

No one will touch another's bucket, but the excitement rises as the bucket fills, lest the next in line should forget to come back and thus be ousted from their place. No regrets, no bitterness, just go to the back of the queue again and risk the wrath of a husband not yet clean enough to call his day finished.

The queue never ends. This plastic serpent just changes colour and form with different times of day.

And from above the crows bear witness, passing comment.

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theorionfive Comment by: theorionfive - 2007-11-13 16:02
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This is interesting - it often makes me want to appreciate the little things even more. I suppose this is about your travels in India. But I also seem to think that this is a good way to take something as small as the drip of water and turn it into a potpourri of thoughts, all colorful and vivid.
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-07-05 06:26
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short but very good . Is there going to be more added I would love to read more . As a few others have said it is like an insight to a story. None the less this os very well written

Good job

Anne
rollingbolus Comment by: rollingbolus - 2007-01-23 08:09
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I like it, it's really fluid (no pun intended) and strikingly visual for so few words
kearby49 Comment by: kearby49 - 2007-01-12 09:28
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This piece is reminiscent in style of John DosPassos' Camera Eye vignettes. Possible alternate title: "The Water Snake"?
antonanon Comment by: antonanon - 2006-12-28 19:53
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Thanks John. You are right of course - I shouldn't have called it.a story, just a moment!
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