War of Words, Peace in thought
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War of Words, Peace in thought
Betrayed, Dismayed
Head in my hands
rock solid point of view
I disobeyed his commands?
how can i understand
heresay kept at bay
choking on words i have to say
give me right give me wrong
dont want to hear that same damn song
i say you say
meet in the middle?
no way!
whatever contradicts me
ill ignore that
regardless of fact
as long as your statements threaten my point of view
than ill quote scripture to spew it back at you
My inner childs in a prison cell
i cry out, to no avail
a heavily defended personal hell
i have enslaved me by no fault of my own
cursed and afflicted before i was born
what can i do give up?
forgive me
YOUR NOT ALONE!
im not condemning you are you condemning me?
so arent we still part of that same family tree?
these words might cut but
their meant to bring you up and not to corrupt
so we agree in silence..were worlds apart
how can we be friends when we havent made amends?
where do i start?
compassion bleeds from a broken heart
im not condemning you are you condemning me?
arent we then part of the same family tree?
fighting a war of words i cant win...
finding peace of mind in time, is that sin?
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I love the flow of this piece! I got right into it!
I deeply enjoyed it! :) |
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Comment by: garcon7 - 2007-01-19 22:24
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| yeah some explanation is needed..its a two way conversation of sorts..the first two stanzas are the other persons point of view throughj my intrepetation..i guess im putting words in their mouth but thats how i felt at the time..i was pissed but compassionate...but mostly pissed..the I thing hmm..i forget too and im lazy is the real answer the more poetic thing to say is its to symbolize my insignificane in this vast universe but that would just be a big steaming pile of bullshit...yet its maybe half true haha anyway |
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| No it isn't a sin, though it is an incredibally hard thing to do sometimes. Good stuff here, though it was a bit hard to follow for me in the second stanza where you put the inner child part, but I re-read it just now and it makes much more sense on the second time through. One thing I've noticed with your poems is that you don't capitalize your I, is that stylistic or something else? |
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