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popeye
Tomisin Adepeju
United Kingdom, London

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Oh Christmas Oh Christmas

Oh Christmas, Oh Christmas,
The sleigh bells are ringing,
The Carolers are singing,
And the angels of God
Are smiling from above.

That time again is here,
No more pain or fear,
A time of love and peace
When all war should cease.

Oh Christmas, Oh Christmas,
How I love it so,
Brings me so much joy I know;
A time to love and share,
What a special time of year.

Oh Christmas, Oh Christmas,
May your dreams come true,
And may God bless you.

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Comment by: - 2007-10-08 17:06
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Thanks for reminding of how joyful christmas is and how i can't wait for it to come this year!lol Thanks so much for your comments!
popeye Comment by: popeye - 2007-08-17 17:33
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thanks for your comments........
heidrunknikander Comment by: heidrunknikander - 2007-08-16 03:16
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This is really nice, a very conventional picture of Christmas.
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2007-03-07 19:32
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I wonder if Hulshizer saw what I see. If I repeat what he said consider it good advice.
The poem is a nice sentiment, well told and well constructed until the last two stanzas. You kinda lost the flow there. Work on them, smooth 'em out.
Second stanza, you're talking about time not place. Last line should read "WHEN all war should cease.
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2007-02-24 04:07
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This was an interesting take on a holiday. There were a number of structural things about this poem that bothered me. I will send a critique by email.
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