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jkaber
Judy K
United States, ME, Belfast

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Small, green garden

Squatting, pinching off green worms, Ava lifted the last cabbage leaf. An infant face stared up, its head resting under the lip of the plant, legs trailing away into weeds. Dead, she thought, not breathing, but then the eyes closed, the child's mouth cupped, it's small hand waved, hitting the leaves.

A strange joke, Ava thought, this child under a cabbage leaf. But she knew no one who would do such a thing, no woman with a child, or friend who carried one. Ava lived alone. She honored loneliness, did not coo over babies, or woo stray and single men. She pushed awkwardly to her feet.

The baby grew smaller, less threatening, looking down on it that way. It fit easily in the untidy row of plants. It wore a sand colored shirt and smudged cloth diaper. Ava marveled at how round its feet were, so unfit for walking.

Ava looked up into the surrounding trees, searching for a bird that might sing, but saw only slits of sky among the branches. She took three careful steps along the row and turned. The child's eyes followed her. Its fist now rested in its mouth.

Don't look at me, Ava thought. I didn't bring you here. Stepping back, bending quickly, she picked up the can of kerosene that held the floating worms. Carrying it in her delicate hands, Ava made her way back to the grey house that stood, like a harsh rock in a barren field.

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GLWard Comment by: GLWard - 2007-01-14 15:44
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So very strange. Don't know what else to say.
Juan2 Comment by: Juan2 - 2007-01-13 13:55
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This had a grim feel to it. I like that it was a voice of an outsider, a loner so to speak. When she picked up the can of kerosene, I thought she was going to get rid of the child by her own means, which would have been verry dark.

Happy Writings.
waxseal Comment by: waxseal - 2007-01-11 12:08
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A very, VERY cool read - I thought there was a lot to think about and you wrote it extrememly well - but the last line didn't do it for me - I wanted something more indifferent than that (when she picked up the kerosene I thougth she was going to light the kid on fire) but anywho - a creepy, wonderful, well thought out piece.
fredav Comment by: fredav - 2007-01-04 06:39
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Wow, Judy. This is a weird story. A bit dark. Surprisingly, I like it. Everything seemed to fit, even the line "Its fist now rested in its mouth." This is such a good read, one i can go over many times and find something new with each read. Nice!
Kerosene Comment by: Kerosene - 2007-01-03 06:20
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I read this twice and thought I got it but then I didnt. Ava lived alone but there was a baby in her garden? Was the baby an animal or something?

I enjoyed this for the sheer mystery of it.
-john
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