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staceyrlouiso
Stacey Louiso
United States, FL, Naples

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...And then he fell..

'¦and then he fell'
gently,
Quickly,
Into a cloud'¦
Which turned to stone;
Flat and smooth,
A perfect circle.

'¦but as he fell'
his eyes burst into flames
and his heart went into his throat.

'¦and when he landed'
he was a corpse'¦
long been stony white.
No eyes, no heart-beat,
No soul to squeeze dry.

'¦and then he fell.

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Idainne Comment by: Idainne - 2007-12-19 06:41
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Amazingly strong imagery here, I absolutely think youve nailed this well done, morbid but in a bittersweet way quite powerful

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mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-03-24 03:46
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Oh poor guy. He didn't have a chance to begin with did he.
Sounds to me like never ending misery. Was that what you were going for?
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