writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
suleem
Suzanne Montpetit
Canada, British Columbia, Nanaimo

Words: 168
Access: Public
Comments: 7

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Can you hear the Rain

Have you seen the rain?
I have.
Do you know I have touched my lips to the window?
Cold, damp, moisture presses softly between my eyelashes
moistens the draught inbetween my cheeks.
Places where the salt from my tears have forged gullies.

Have you heard the thunder?
The pain in my head aroused by an infinity of numbness.
The crackle of a once known voice bleating love.
kindness now lost in the drums that play endlessly.

I am blinded by the lightning.
The bolts of electricity that curse through my body.
The white light that heaven holds reinforced in anger.
My anger for what I see inside of me.

Softly I step back,
take the view widely.
Look unwards toward the clouds and their greyness.
like clay waiting to be molded
shaped into the darkness of night.

I can see now the rain,
mirrors of droplets, distorting yet comforting
the images falling apart as they hit the ground.
puddles forming around my feet.

Now I am the rain.

Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-04-21 09:37
Add to Readers
      
I love the rain and all the best bits you've described here. Yet, I feel this is more of a poem about surrender and enjoying the moments.
starrfly Comment by: starrfly - 2007-02-16 22:01
Add to Readers
      
You are a spellcaster!! I don't think I have the words to say how much I enjoyed reading this one. Suffice ti to say it makes me want to be a better writer.
TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2007-02-15 08:19
Add to Readers
      
"Places where the salt from my tears have forged gullies" is a brilliant line and powerful image, showing your scars to natures touch.

i like this poem because it's natural content allows you to feel the connection.

a great reflection onyourself.
Cmtheonly Comment by: Cmtheonly - 2007-02-08 11:54
Add to Readers
      
I am kind of confused with this poem.. Is it sadness, but seeking quiet and going towards calm? Are you part of the rain as in feelings?
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos Online- 2007-02-04 17:49
Add to Readers
      
I love your style here suleem, It's great to catch up with your poetries. Loves these lines

Places where the salt from my tears have forged gullies.

sugg:
(moistens the draught in (space) between my cheeks.

puddles forming around my feet
Now I am the rain

Nice piece.
1 2 Next

Sponsored Ads


By suleem

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S