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SqueakyWheels
Ben Singleton
Europe, London

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The Deal (a song)

(For anyone interested you can hear this song at the MySpace link above)

Once there was a man of fire,
Of steel, and righteous worth,
He cried out grant me your power lord,
I'll be your saviour here on earth,
At this the devil did appear,
And said I can make you a deal,
Just put your blood on this contract here,
And together we can make it real.

(Spoken)
The man and the devil walked side by side for 40 days and 40 nights. They walked the mountains and plains and they saw the ways of man and watched them dance wild and free, fearing no one God.
The man turned to the devil and said;

Oh Lord I have such visions,
Visions of a promised land,
Together we will save them
deliver them man by man,
The devil turned his hand out stretched,
His eyes burning fiery red, he said,
Come on now son, its time to get things done,
Its time these people were led.

(Spoken)
The devil took the mans hand and led him through the valley of the shadow of death. He helped him teach the people of earth to fear the wrath of God and to worship the new saviour.
The men and women began to fear each other, and erected a great podium for the man and the devil to preach their gospel.

Repent, divert your paths of sin,
Because I am your saviour, Because I am your saviour,
Atone, the only true path is through me,
Because I am your saviour, Because I am your saviour,
Follow as for in me is the light.
Because I am your saviour, Because I am your saviour,

(Spoken)
The people of Earth were true to the gospel and worked hard at the devils tasks, until their eyes sunk and grew pale and thin.
However they grew tired of the new order and craved the life they had left behind. The men and women turned to confront the man;

Oh man turn your back on the devil,
We don't need a saviour, We don't need a saviour,
Come join us we forgive you,
We don't need a saviour, We don't need a saviour,
Give us your hand we'll face the future together,
We don't need a saviour, We don't need a saviour,
Forget the devil stand tall and true with us,
We don't need a saviour, We don't need a saviour,

(Spoken)
The man turned and shoulder to shoulder with his fellow men they threw the devil into the deep blue sea. The seas boiled and the skies burned red, but the men and women feared nothing as together they were strong.
The man saw that he was weak with out his fellow men and that the only true strength was through them.

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seancolledge Comment by: seancolledge - 2007-01-09 16:04
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I like this, and it has the potential of being a bit of an epic poem along the lines of the sort of stuff Lewis Carroll churned out. There are also still a few grammar issues you may want to check out, so a re-draft might be a plan!
Rookie Comment by: Rookie - 2007-01-09 15:41
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I liked this piece. It showed that alone we are sometimes weak but if we let others in we can stronger as a group.
SqueakyWheels Comment by: SqueakyWheels - 2007-01-09 12:57
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Sorry, my spelling is terrible (as is my grammer) I will correct it post haste.
Thanks
flypaper Comment by: flypaper - 2007-01-09 12:53
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I like how in the beginning (first 5 lines) it misleads the reader as 'Lord' would usually be the man upstairs not he who dwells in the basement. The devil seems to be a likable chap in this poem, kind of a turning of tables. Is it 'They (threw) the devil into the deep blue sea'?
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