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lyrically yours
cathy delaleu
United States, NY, new york

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SINGULAR Voyage

You found a way to secure your spine through a telescope
Using hair extensions and semi-permanent eyelashes
To advertise your solitude
A desolate wind sings you prayers
Like the sound of a waterfall
You see the face of nuns beaming at the sight of your hanging breasts
Untouched
They glow like butter lamps
Shudder as men scatter compassionate verses on your back
Flocks of men cling on your golden monastery
They climb the highest mountain of Jacmel to gain social insight
The men pay attention to your sweet puddles
Your geological past is easy for them to sip
They slurp your Haitian continent in wine glasses
Toast their feet on withered hills
You move with your heart stuffed in sheepskin
You're a wanderer with no sense of direction
Hoping the men will notice your face smooth with salted clouds
What they see is a girl encrusted on a hillside
With sunlight blinding her eyelashes
Close your eyes before their blades
Shatter your pure heart
©2006 by C. Delaleu

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aysmiles Comment by: aysmiles - 2007-12-13 01:40
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Beautifully constructed, full of metaphoric phrases. I respect you as a writer. The irony is cool.
aysmiles Comment by: aysmiles - 2007-12-13 01:40
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Beautifully constructed, full of metaphoric phrases. I respect you as a writer. The irony is cool.
lyrically yours Comment by: lyrically yours - 2007-01-25 07:54
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Thank you so much for appreciating this piece
InHizImage Comment by: InHizImage - 2007-01-22 12:47
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I agree with Dunny, it is very allegorical and the flow is beautifully intertwined through metaphors and similes. No suggestions. Good write ~ Yvylyn
iris7s9 Comment by: iris7s9 - 2007-01-21 22:35
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This poem reminds of a mountain ridge in Utah... It looks like a girl laying on her side. Men flock to her and climb her for fame...
Excellent way of using your words to paint a picture of Haiti.
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