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Circles
When will I learn
Truth is in your heart
Not in words, stories or gossip
Worry, anxiety fear
In circles I run
Listening to all I hear
Round and round I go
Trying to find truth
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| A beautiful simplicity, well-formed, concise, shaped effectively. I disagree with Water (sorry Water! :-) ), as I think your version is just right - it has a kind of terse brevity that really works to portray this inner confusion, this searching for something you keep on reminding yourself you actually know is already there. |
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Comment by: - 2007-02-05 07:46
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| this is so short and simple, yet has so much meaning and purpose. i love the use of circles to portray so many things in life. this is well done here. nice work. |
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hey,
This piece read like a bit of good philosophy. I like the formatting of the peice. It definately added to the over all effectivenes and expression of the theme I think
great piece. Thnaks for the read.
peace,
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Comment by: water - 2007-01-20 12:12
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Hi
Just a suggestion...
When will I learn
Truth is in the heart
Not in words, stories or gossip.
Worry, anxiety and fear
Filling our lives
In circles I run.
Listening to all I hear
Round and round I go
Trying to find
The truth in all..... |
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Comment by: tcbswan - 2007-01-18 11:36
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| there is so much truth in what you have written--sorry to use the word 'truth.' (smile). you convey the endless cycle of not being able to realize what is already within--what you are searching for you all ready have. thanks for the post--looking forward to reading more. |
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