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a little bit of reasoning
what's the mood of the generation? we sometimes see life as a burden set in a way, with the impulse to think that with hardship- (sometimes imagined) comes righteousness'.
It's the irrationalized compulsion to think that he who has endured unpleasantly and has surpassed those said unpleasant endearments will become a higher form of man- At least in regards to his piers.
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when I read this one I noticed that it was entirely different writting style then the other ones that you have up on here but I like it alot. The message I got was that when life throws you a curve ball and you are able to conquer the challenge, you will be stronger than others that shy from such and obstacle. But this is really a false reality to think in such a way.
That makes perfect sense yo. Good work once again |
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Excellent. And thorough writing deserves thorough comments.
Yet, this is one of those moments when I ask myself,
are we here to comment on just the form, structure
and style of the writing; or should we comment
on its content too. Sometimes they are not so separable.
The will, the imagination, the spirit has hopes
and visions that would not be limited by mere reality.
Such is our paradoxical nature. Thus life may seem burdensome.
I enjoyed your micro-essay. It begins with a disarming
fascinating question, and poses some possibly answers without
necessarily submitting to the judgements of older generations.
Now with the backslapping done, some constructive criticism
might be in order.
Some of your phrasing intrigues. "Irrationalized compulsion"
has a substantial different meaning to "irrational compulsion".
The term "rationalized" has entered common parlance from the
work of Freud, and actually denotes an irrational use of reasoning;
hence "to irrationalize" implies an opposite of the "irrational use
of reasoning". Did you intend such logical contortions, are you indeed
writing in a Zen Master kind of way - presenting us with logical koans: yoga for the consciousness. Salutary!
But even Zen masters must spell effectively - if there meaning is to be
taken as they intend it . Your "unpleasant endearments" refers back
to your remarks about enduring. So you meant to say "unpleasant endurements" did you not? (a most agreeable coinage of phrase by the way)
Your phrase "a higher form of man- At least in regards to his piers."
A "pier" is a wharf. A "peer" is someone of similar age, status etc to oneself. But perhaps you were right, after all, who would not wish to be a higher form of human than mere wharves.
Looking forward to more of your writing and musings. |
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Great start to what sounds like an interesting essay.
piers - peers? |
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Comment by: rmorgan - 2007-05-27 23:29
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| wow. well put. i honestly cant say more than that |
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| A short thought provoking powerful piece. |
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