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yican
Dewi Putri Kirana
Indonesia, DKI Jakarta, Jakarta

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Grim Tales

Once there was a Bard who loves to tell happy tales. He traveled all around the world to recite stories of adventures, of brave knights rescuing beautiful princesses, of young magicians who save kingdoms, of flying people who live amongst clouds and stars. Everywhere he went, people gathered around him, old and young alike, to be mystified by his charming voice. When he sighed everyone would sigh too, when he yelled everyone would feel fire erupted inside their heart.

His name shone throughout the continent, until the King himself invited him to live in his grand castle. But the humble Bard refused. He preferred to continue on his journey through the land and sea, to entertain everyone he met. To spread the smile he saw on people's faces.

But then came the time when people got bored with his tales. Everyone started to demand for tragic stories, of wars raging in faraway lands, of houses burned down by tyrants, of culprits and robbers and slayers who lurked the night. The Bard tried to recite heartbreaking stories, but he could not utter one word. For he believed people deserved joyful stories to enlighten their lives.

Days gone by and fewer people listened to him. Everywhere he went only bored expressions he got from people. No more smiles anywhere. Then one day people stopped listening to him. No more invitation from the King, no more free bed at inns, no more food nor drink. The Bard was left alone, sad and broke.

One day there was an audition for a storyteller at an inn near where the Bard lived. Desperate for once again spreading his tales of smiles and sunshine, the Bard joined the throng who lined up outside the inn. He, who once had been invited by the King himself, must stand in line along others! But he suppressed the feeling and waited patiently.

Finally, 71, his number, was read aloud by the innkeeper's daughter. Hopes bloomed out in his heart when he entered the inn. Maybe finally he could see again the smiles on people's faces.

The innkeeper sat on a stool in the middle of the common room, facing an empty stage. His bored expression was plain. Without a word he signaled the Bard to take his place on the stage.

Feeling he was home at last, the Bard recited his tales perfectly, of brave knights rescuing beautiful princesses, of young magicians who save kingdoms, of flying people who live amongst clouds and stars. He whispered and sighed and shouted and even sang. Finally when he finished, he looked up expectantly at the innkeeper.

'Do you have sadder tales?'¯ was all the innkeeper said.

The Bard was heartbroken. He pulled out his knife and stabbed it right into his chest.

'How about this?'¯ he shrieked. 'A grim tale about a bard who kills himself because nobody wants to listen to his stories anymore because they are simply not SAD enough!'¯

'Too clichĆ©,'¯ replied the innkeeper. 'Next!'¯

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KennethWelling Comment by: KennethWelling - 2007-04-27 10:45
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Ironic that your tale might have satisfied the innkeeper? I agree with the sentiment. Reminds me of my last magazine contest submission. Instead of the insightful comedy I wrote (about arrogant authors), they published two non-fiction pieces from people who had friends die.
Hardcore Zen Comment by: Hardcore Zen - 2007-04-18 19:44
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ok, i'm really getting sick of people who correct grammer...
it seems insulting to the story
your story it excellent, and although the grammer is off a bit, who cares! you can read around it so long as its still readable, and itsnt the story more important than the grammer anyways?

but even though i think this story is wonderful just the way is is I sorta had my hopes up for a more epic ending and i would still sorta like to see you write one

although i dont really think it would top the ending you already have you never know what good could come of it, after all if i could see such possibilities for epic endings to this story, im sure you could spin creative gold with the oppertunity
Cherley Comment by: Cherley - 2007-04-11 19:13
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Very funny. Eventhough I enjoyed it and it was such a nice story and then whamo--he was no more. I'd like to see it longer with a different ending. A couple of minor points. erupted=erupt Days (went) gone by and fewer people listened to him. Everywhere he went(,he only received bored expressions from the village people) only bored expressions he got from people.
must stand in line along (beside) others!
This paragraph is very well written: Feeling he was home at last, the Bard recited his tales perfectly,--I think you need to decide what tense you want to tell this story in, some of it seems past tense and some of it seems present tense.
Like suggested read it outloud or if possible have someone else read it outloud to you.

It was a fun story. Thanks
CINDYANNE99 Comment by: CINDYANNE99 - 2007-03-26 01:52
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Wow, what an interesting little story. The ending , excellent. Advice from me would be also to maybe read over the grammar, I felt a little distracted with a section or two seeming a little over done in that department. Like above advice I agree reading it aloud is the best way to gain a feel for the grammar behind the story. It was a very entertaining read. :D
nonalienabductee Comment by: nonalienabductee Online- 2007-03-01 19:41
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Heh, heh. Emo bard! I liked the ending, but I think your tone is rather uneven here. First it's Fairy tale-like, then it's morose, then it's sardonic. I think if you made this longer, then the tone changes would be fine--great, even--but right now, it's very awkward and abrupt at times.
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