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deathbyacid
jason fitzpatrick
United States, ohio, zanesville

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failing

for the starlit sky
becoming a blissfull ride
seven strange days of passing sunsets
forgeting numbers that we'd met

ever going on and on
life is planning on failing
to make you a demons dream
try to save a bitter theme
go to hell you evil queen

we dont want the misery
lost in space is disease
only when we must be pleased
life just plans on failing

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sudipal Comment by: sudipal - 2007-04-01 14:03
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So spiteful and angry... I like this.
GrkGrl Comment by: GrkGrl - 2007-03-19 23:36
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yeah your imagery rocked in this jason...and i was taken by your opening stanza....nice one....gg
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-03-13 11:54
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This is lovely in a dark way, nice use of language.
Imaginarydeath Comment by: Imaginarydeath - 2007-02-27 09:39
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hmmm evil queen nicely put.but am I that evil,for isnt evil as pure as innocence?
Comment by: - 2007-02-17 14:05
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"lost in space is disease"


...i wish it wher that way!!


short sweet write hun! ;)
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