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Comment by: sadon - 2007-11-10 06:27
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the beauty of this poem is that in a few lines u've touched all corners of life and death. i love it..really,its simplicity and truth is touching.
go alieenn** :) |
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Comment by: sarra - 2007-11-06 04:24
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Truly a brilliant and powerful poem. I never thought about their pov with a light in that particular way before. I think I'll feel a little sad from now on everytime I see bugs at a light, knowing their sad fate should they linger too long or dare get too close...
Still, a very good poem! |
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| Who would have thought such beauty lies in something so small, you're poem is short and beautiful,I read it three times and each time it seemed more meaningful, makes me think....and I like to think;) |
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| I would drop the two 'its'. Otherwise, a though-provoking poem, its tenderness not compromised by its brevity. |
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Because this is such a short poem, I was wondering if the last line would work as "Moths trying to reach Heaven."
I suppose then you would have to change the title as well.
Just a thought. It's gold as it stands. |
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