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proliterati
moses abukutsa
Kenya, n/a, bunyore

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crash in a crush:one

She swayed like a dancer
and i stood like a piper
time moved so slowly
my mind nothing near holy.

So the holiday of hearts
where they bask in the sand seas of love
came like the assembly of wicked parts
in one night i was smothered and so smitten in love.

so ithought of her as i dreamn't under the moon
she rushed in my memory
like a thriler she hang on it
i was mad in fantasy of her moonface
she was so in the veins of my heart
i clang on my fantasy
i didn't know it would end in misery.

The next night!

My heart was burning
at the end i was crying
she was in betwwen my hate
when i thought it was destiny
fate was in the twist
my system crashed
it was after the crush.

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lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-27 03:01
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Terrific! beautiful sentiment. The longing...
dammonjay Comment by: dammonjay - 2007-10-03 04:23
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great piece. iloved every bit of it
proliterati Comment by: proliterati - 2007-04-09 04:16
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thanks hatchzel
hatchzel Comment by: hatchzel - 2007-04-02 19:57
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Great write. You nailed it and I think you did your best, It's on my shelf and keep on writing:)
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-03-09 11:01
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This is cleverly done. It almost has a "thriller-like" feel. You convey the emotions very well. This is one of my favorite reads so far.
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