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EatThoseStars
christopher spencer
United States, nc, charlotte

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Advice Loves Hindsight

You should sing those rhythms louder
now that you've stopped spinning
and come across
your perfect blue sky.
My cloudless location
was in the way she stood silent
and looked at everyone
but me.
You should paint those pictures brighter
in the event
someone has a point to prove.
it seems as if i need new hands;
mine have worn down
embarrassing her with hollow touches.
You should find her
and give her my apologies;
she may accept them
from another face.

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zepol Comment by: zepol - 2007-10-14 20:32
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Well done Chris. This is one very smooth and aesthetically pleasing piece. Thanks for a good read.
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-05-26 01:54
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The amount of care taken in choosing just the right words as if not wanting cause anymore hurt is just lovely.
The blue sky methaphore was nice touch.
Enjoyed the read.. we want more! :)
Pantheress Comment by: Pantheress - 2007-02-06 22:37
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i feel this poem, it's excellent
daphnejean
mommaZ82 Comment by: mommaZ82 - 2007-02-02 20:44
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"embarrassing her with hollow touches"
Nice line. I like that. Very insightful.
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