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Sankylady20
Sarah Hopkins
United States

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Our dance

In a dream is where "we" began,
But reality does not recognize our song.
So although when i dream,
we have an eternal dance,
When i awake, i am alone.

What intense defines,
is our hurt filled eyes,
And silent cries for the hand
we cant seem to hold.
we cant seem to touch unless i close my eyes,
and we arrive in a ballrom of our souls.

the song that plays ,
tells of an eternal blaze,
of a fire between to smiles,
Trapped in our own bliss ,
we danced in our wish,
and stayed there for just a little while.

When i return to real,
i am alone still ,
my thoughts are , as always, swept away.
Memory collapes, and the fantasy traps us.
and The sun is in haze once again.

Our secret dance,
is that of an eternal trance ,
incredible beauty and smooth harmony,
Deep understanding, of all our minds are demanding,
our dance is an escape for "we".

But when i see your face, in this reality place,
You seem to be a stranger to me.
My fantasy you , Is the definition of untrue,
its something i wish you could be.

You're A writer, A poem,
you're a masterpiece, and a song.

A dream,
in a beautiful ballrom scene,
where only "we" and our dance belong.

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Afrka Comment by: Afrka - 2007-12-05 06:32
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Remarkable write. Very vivid and nice sense of imagination. Stay blessed!
alzariah Comment by: alzariah - 2007-10-29 06:54
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a fairy world that fascinate ones about the first dance with our lover and the dream that the song never end. happy to read your writing and good lucks for more!!!!
dammonjay Comment by: dammonjay - 2007-10-03 04:00
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this piece "gripped" me from start to end... i had to snap out of it cos the grip it had on me was so strong. i like it big time
popeye Comment by: popeye - 2007-08-21 14:53
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Wonderful and beautifully written piece of poetry, you captured my imagination from the beginning to the end. You clearly illustrate the dreamer's world of fantasy and that of reality- you demonstrate in this poem that somethings in life are just beyond reach as they dwell only in the world of our dreams - although we yearn for them- they are evidently beyond grasp. Well done on conveying a poem filled with such deep emotions, SIMPLY BRILLANT..........
Dreque Comment by: Dreque - 2007-06-18 19:18
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This is so beautiful! I feel you with this one. I dream the dreams of fantasies too.
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