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Sankylady20
Sarah Hopkins
United States

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I think you're beautiful

Beautiful,
the definition of a hand,
with the ability to hold the entire world in it's palms,
a description of eyes,
that can peirce even the hardest of hearts.
Eyes with the ability to see through any wall,
that stands between you and I.
Beautiful words spoken from the lips of an angel,
with a voice that can sing the song of our past, present ,and future.
A voice that can ease any mind,on the hardest of days.
I think you're beautiful, thats what I think.

I belive every word you say,
and I keep any secret you tell.
So what kind of a man is Beautiful?
You, who can't control
the ammount of emence beauty you contain.
Beauty is a man who has all the reason,
to make a lost soul found, so find me.
Because I think you're beautiful.
Beauty is you.
A beautiful mind and a beautiful smile,
Beautiful courage and beautiful insanity.
You are insane with pride,
deserving of all that you gain.
What you gain is greatness and poetry.
What kind of a man is beautiful?
Beauty is you,
I think you're Beautiful

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Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-07-01 12:01
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Very nice. Not your best, but enjoyable. Singing praise.

The line "...the ammount of emence beauty you contain" is very easily misunderstood since the spelling is so, ah, street.
christskorb11 Comment by: christskorb11 - 2007-02-12 00:04
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Ive written a riddle that somewhat, though of course not as thoroughly, conveys some of what you describe in the first stanza, The utterly benevolent view of a lover. Its truley majestic
shulammite33 Comment by: shulammite33 - 2007-02-06 02:17
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This piece sings, even to my mind which is jumping across the universe today and cannot concentrate.
I once gave an assignment to my writing class to write a poem for someone without using the word beautiful. I would almost have let this one pass.
Euripides Comment by: Euripides - 2007-02-03 14:34
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"to make a lost soul found so, find me"
is the comma supposed to be there, or before the word "so"?

I notice that you have one line in the poem that is quite long compared to the others. Is this intentional (I noticed the same in another piece)? I makes the particular line read wushing along in my head and that seems at odds with the concept the words are saying.
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