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Nameless Monster
A dark, lonley beast
One of terror and deciet
I see it on the news
I read about its expolits
I hear it call for the blood of Mankind
I feel its essence rise in Me!
How can I have compassion for a monster?
Will analysis give perspective?
Can the Dali Lama bring me enlightenment?
If I ignore it will it ignore me?
What part of my being do I call forth ,to gain tolerance and grace for a monster?
This monster has confused the minds of men, scaring them into action before thought.
This creature has taken the earth from East to West.
It masks itself as frienship and sencerity.
Like a virus its gains power from misunderstanding, intolerance and bigotry. This vile creature hides is true self in doctrine and esoteric prose.
Placing demands on its victims that they should not have to bear.I cannot see how to fight this Nameless Monster.
The only way I know how to tame it is not to become it.
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| Very poignant and provoking! This can stand for so many things. The monster that you speak of can be seen differently by different people, and I think that is something that speaks volumes. I adore this! Thanks for sharing! |
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| Yeah, I really did not know who you are referring to by nameless monster. But if i'm to tell the truth, I say GW Bush so...how he rationalizes his action? Huh, war against terrorism? Crap! something like war for peace. In deed, murder for murder or violence for violence cannot be justified... |
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Hi Jennifer. An intriguing write, but a few typos that need to be rectified: "lonely", "deceit" and "exploits" in the first couple of lines. It should also be the "Dalai" Lama. "Friendship" and "sincerity" also need to be corrected, as well as "it gains" and "its true self". Sorry to be so picky but I feel these are basic typos that need to be corrected.
I'm intrigued that you equate yourself with the criticisms, as you do with the veil piece. Is writing a way of acknowledging the truth in yourself? I guess it should be for all of us.
Paul :D |
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Comment by: costa Online- 2007-02-04 05:06
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my reading of the last line is that in fact it's a nice little allusion to Nietzsche ("look into the abyss") and that the narrator can't defeat the external monsters, only try to remain "un-monster" (for want of a better word) herself.
but that's just my reading of it.
"If I ignore it, will it IGNORE me"
if one reads the words in the actual posted work, it conjures up childhood images of closing one's eyes so as not to see monsters, in the belief that "if they can't see me, I can't see them" - so, not so much denial as a prayer for apathy, or salvation through inaction.
And if we waited to be precise about our vents, then no-one would ever be published...writers should vent at every opportunity, at the most ridiculous times and in the strangest of ways. IMHO.
once again, i'm not too good with technicalities, but IMO you don't need the very first line "The world has a nameless monster" - the first stanza describes the nameless beast wonderfully.
The length of the last lines? That may be just my stylistic conciet, I attempt to make lines in my work (with varying success) as short as possible - but that's just me.
I do like introspective comments on the state iof the world, and I enjoyed reading this one immensely. Thanks for posting Jennifer.
(- if you want to see (IMHO) the best free form poet from the 20th century, search out some of Wallace Stevens' work. I believe his brilliance has yet to be surpassed, and I think you'd enjoy and gain alot from some of his poems.)
Feel free to ignore anything I have just said - purely opinion. Cheers. |
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Comment by: - 2007-02-03 23:24
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"If I ignore it will it abandon me?"
ahh, so you ask a denial question. do you really need it?
"The only way I know how to tame it is not to become it."
you want my honest opinion, this sentence means your the monster too cause you blame it, put it on a cross, but solution would be to ignore it, forget it and live in your own world.
The truth about writers and there venting should only be done if done with a precision that even the greatest of the minds would seem as a mystery, read my work. |
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