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| Wow this is a powerful poem. It immediately makes me add to it, but I like it just the way it is, it's nice to leave things to the reader's imagination every once in awhile |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-02-10 18:01
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DO NOT CHANGE THIS !!!!!
It is perfect.** |
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| Now when it's been mentioned twice, I see that this piece might not be done. It's powerful as it is, but I could do more with it. Or perhaps it is best left to imagination. I bet that whoever that reads this can come up with the rest. ;) |
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ummm.. 0_0 that's slightly uncomfortable LOL
The meter is very steady, it would do well if you ever decided to expand this piece, because the meter is so adaptable.
Good craft work there
peace,
MM |
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Sorry Lance, I just dream of someone who will kiss me that way. ;)
Thanks you two. And thanks to a certain actor who inspires me to write stuff like this. |
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