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Manda
Amanda Walczesky
United States, South Carolina, Lexington

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Love, A Vile Creature

we wait for it
patiently, as time
peels paint from fading walls
as the sun bleaches color
out of stained glass

it takes its sweet time
to writhe up from its hole
shaking off black ash
from past victims

once it had a pure skin
translucent and scented
oh how beautiful
we caressed it, held it gently
it is fragile, we thought
something to take care of

how wrong we were

once it found a home
the claws unsheathed
deep lines of pain
it slowly carved across
our bewildered hearts

now, known for its true self
it dispenses with the pleasantries
and drapes its being with
ropes of broken hearts
knotted garlands wet
with countless tears

though we are no longer deceived
we still wait for it
hoping for the smallest
glimmer of beauty
to break free of its
cold rotting skin
and become ours


02/04/07

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ThiaHarrington Comment by: ThiaHarrington - 2007-08-15 08:20
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This is a beautiful piece.
Such intensity as it weaves its way back and forth across the proverbial fine line.
Great read. I enjoyed it very much.
mmerlucci Comment by: mmerlucci - 2007-07-08 15:33
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"it takes its sweet time
to writhe up from its hole
shaking off black ash
from past victims"

I'm interested in that line cause it sounds like you are symbolzing a creature, which one? Or is it a made up creature?
Elucidate Comment by: Elucidate - 2007-06-27 21:20
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good good, keep up the good writing!
Parthena Comment by: Parthena - 2007-06-26 22:09
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I'm very impressed! It speaks profoundly to the place of disillusionment that we've all felt at times. The descriptive language is poetry at its finest. Bravo.
LadyEgyptia Comment by: LadyEgyptia - 2007-06-12 18:11
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Oh wow, I simply loved this. Every single word was perfectly placed with a wonderful sense of rhythm and pacing. Beautiful work!
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