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Rae
Tawny Christine
United States, South Carolina

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Sated

At times, a glance is all it takes,
No long term commitment,
To make that infatuation phase
Go faster'¦
Just a look to provoke the
Beginning of a smile-
While the yearning and hunger are sated.

Walking down the hallway,
A mere look in that direction
Is a feast for the eyes;
A holiday everyday
And like magical vittles.

It becomes the desired truth,
That too much of a good thing
Becomes good to the most infinite of degrees-
Not stifled by oaths-
No words needing to be shared.

And it comes as amazement,
That one-
That I
Can subsist on so little'¦

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shaft Comment by: shaft - 2006-06-24 11:46
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I love the phrase 'magic vittles'. Good poem, seems to be too specific to be the fantasy poem mentioned but maybe it's that broad.
I'm unfamiliar with the style but reading it out loud I was pleasantly surprised to find that it works, must be something wrong in my head.
love Comment by: love - 2006-06-08 02:10
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well done!
i love the choice of vocabulary and rich imagery of the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.
Funkylele Comment by: Funkylele - 2006-04-21 07:49
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A nice description of what happens when eyes that know collide :)
Cari Comment by: Cari - 2006-04-17 03:19
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i really like it , keep writing
Manda Comment by: Manda - 2006-03-26 19:10
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there seems to be a longing that's hidden behind the words in this poem. perhaps more intense langauge would bring it out better, though maintaining the subtlety is definitely important: it keeps it sensual. nice work.
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