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tiger
ken cole
United States, al., birmingham

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tangled

In my restless dreams my thick fingers are tangled in your long soft hair My gaze is tangled within yours as we softly kiss with eyes wide open Sunlight streams through tattered blinds Laying bright streaks across our naked souls Side by side we lay, legs tangled together like windblown hair, Bodies entwined, touching closer than we ever thought possible At least in my dreams, I am tangled up in you

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MEA da POET Comment by: MEA da POET - 2007-02-16 20:13
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I do like this. Your word choice and arramgements help to convey the passion you have for this person you are tangled with. It would be a little easier to read if it was spread out or commas, something was used to separate the phrasing. This was a beautiful piece over all.
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-02-16 12:34
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I am not one to follow form rules but this was hard to read because the sentences were so close to each other.

That said, you paint a very sensual dream.

I like the kiss with both eyes open. To me that symbolizes love not lust.

Enjoyed**
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