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| loved the ending on this - whittles a warmer spoon to sample summer - really original and lovely. Thanks for the read. |
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| Butterflies flutter, bees buzz,hover,dive. Hover might be the best word. Nice word play. |
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| I really liked this poem, I love the imagery, I like the way you write i really do. ~ Sarah |
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| a nice soft piece of imagery...don't like "flutter" for bees, Big bumble bees buzz...may be more apppropriate, but the overall "feel" to this piece is wonderful..and the whittling of spring to sample the upcoming summer is quite brilliant.....Lance:) |
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this was a buoyant piece.
a warmer spoon to sample summer
loved those lines! (only one small sugg. how about "to sip summer" instead of sample, just a thought)...
Lovely piece, very light and airy. Thanks for the pleasure to read |
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