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The Inexistence of Demons
Demons dwell beneath the overpass
at night. Their screams
are hoarse, like bald tires biting
the road with a mosquito's indifference. Footsteps
of these empty city streets
keep time in red and green beats. Weeds
sprout through the concrete,
seedlings cling to my soles,
litter of the earth. I tend
to brush it off. My door lock
is a brass gong,
its clang warns my appliances
to commence their chatter. The clock chimes
in with an opinion and the black
head of a dead beetle rests upon my pillow.
Mid-morning, I watch rainfall
from my scalp and swirl
down where bubbles burst
and baby alligators grow,
or so I've heard.
This could all just be another tall-tale.
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Nice flow and structure with this poem. Liked the 4th and 5th stanzas the best, especially the vision of a dead beetle.
"like bald tires biting" - dont know about this. Bald tires skid and slide.
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Comment by: Mick - 2008-01-29 03:11
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Really good. I like the format you have used to write this.
Its so fitting with the whole piece. Excellent ! |
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Comment by: Thula7 - 2008-01-15 21:53
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I like this poem. I like the way you have broken up the stanzas, in the middle of sentences. Love the last two stanzas, and also,
"...the black
head of a dead beetle rests on my pillow."
Thanks for the read! |
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Just reread it and I've decided I love it.
My favorite parts are "Demons dwell beneath the overpass
at night,"
"its clang warns my appliances
to silence their chatter."
"In the morning, I watch the rain fall
from my scalp and swirl
down where bubbles burst
and baby alligators grow,
or so Iā??ve heard.
This could all just be another tall-tale." |
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| I like the rhythm and how sometimes it feels like thepiece is rhyming without blatant rhymes. Very interesting and intreguing poem |
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