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danielunknown
daniel unknown
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who are you?

Look at you
in that suit,
your hair slicked back
just so to cover that bald spot;
talking down to your flock;
speaking as if
your words
came from the most high, Himself,
whoever that is.
A great man of God,
they call you
and you would say
the same.
They sit row by row,
clinging to your words.
In a pause,
you draw a hankie
from your suit jacket
and wipe from your brow
the sweat brought on
by the big, bright lights.
Cutting your eyes over to me.
A dirty look given
by a great man of God,
meaning, Sit up straight.
'Straight to Hell,' I mutter.
Who are you?
I know.
Just this morning
you were yellin' at your old lady.
Who are you?
I know.
I know who you are.
Dad.

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Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2008-09-14 11:46
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Oh, this is soooo good, and it became more profound after the third reading. I like the irony of "Dad." I have one of these "Dad" poems, myself.

I can't see anything to critique. This is a winner. Loved It.
nurseytonya Comment by: nurseytonya - 2007-07-04 16:13
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oh wow! Yes even people who call themselves men and women of God are not always good people, I've seen this in my life. Although I know plenty that are good people. This was well written, the ending had a little bit of a punch to it which I'm a big fan of. great job! : )
mootiy Comment by: mootiy - 2007-05-30 10:02
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I really like this too, great flow of words and emotion. Thanks for sharing.
quilterofwords Comment by: quilterofwords - 2007-05-22 05:44
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I felt the emotion and passion in this poem.
Good Job!
Comment by: - 2007-04-18 11:26
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"Straight to Hell, I mutter" sits quite well with me :)
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