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Gregory
Gregory Dancer
United Kingdom, Oxfordshire, Banbury

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Elephant from a great Height;very messy!

Laconic meadows of sleepy tree branches ,lazy grass lolling
Below a blue yawning sky.
Brief spasm bursts of windy breath, carrying a flotilla of daffodils
across this idyllic scene.
Then the elephant hit the ground.
SPLAT! blood, intestines and various other organs
Carpeted the landscape; leaving a image almost akin to a Jackson Pollock painting.
Although the events leading up to the untimely death of theUnfortunate pachyderm, were much more M C Escher.

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lornawelsh Comment by: lornawelsh - 2007-02-22 13:08
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this is visually shocking and lyrically brilliant x
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2007-02-22 10:55
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This is fucking great.
GrkGrl Comment by: GrkGrl - 2007-02-18 18:19
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you had me at "Laconic Meadows"....
smackalicious Comment by: smackalicious - 2007-02-18 16:10
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Haha, that was clever. I love it. The bit at the end about the artists was great. It's so funny because the beginning is such a nice scene and then it gets dirty. I think I like this.
Comment by: - 2007-02-18 16:07
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it presents an interesting (if a bit gory) mental image...
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