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werewolf
momentary weakness, ravenous urgency
flesh, thanatos
the moon was beautiful each time, sullen and pale
my dominatrix
and i never regretted, i never regretted
bloodthirst, sensuous
a cyclic phenotype
in my mouth the taste of man
and in my chest the feel of helplessness
i have fed when others have starved
i have satiated this well of
violent intimacy
gorged on putrid flesh, forgetfulness
forgetfulness
i arise an angel with the new moon,
lips parched by the dryness of wake
pure in intent
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| Well done. Unique imagery and well chose words. I think you captured well the "beast" that resides within all of us, hungry for flesh (metaphorically, of course). Intimacy with passion (hunger) begets powerful words. Beautiful. |
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"...I have satiated this well of
violent intimacy..."
I think that perhaps this may very well be my favorite line in your poem. I am uncertain on why, because I read the poem over, and over to let it roll around inside of my head. The poem itself is very much about what it is titled, it seems...
Mostly, I enjoyed it because it made me feel so strongly empowered. |
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'I arise an angel with the new moon'
I love that line. Incredible imagery and powerful. It's eerie and beautiful all at the same time. ~Jezzy |
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Comment by: - 2007-03-30 10:00
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i used "putrid" today to describe fish. putrid flesh is bogglin :) i likey how "i have fed when others have starved" is followed by a repetitive follow up that is more elaborate and filled with a confident air if you know what i mean. it's like you would pause after the first line just to catch your breath for the next. i felt that. i might end it a little differently though. keep that sentence a goin
and way to go!! |
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Comment by: hx - 2007-03-22 13:34
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| particularly inspired use of repitition. Excellent work. Thanks for sharing. |
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