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Londonslights
Richard Duncombe
United Kingdom, London

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Hitch the River

Lets take a car to the sleepy river
There 'aint nothing here but the scraps of magazines and wash cloths in the pantry

Dust it dances on a cracked windshield waltz, my head's still full of stories 'bout violins and apple trees

Clear to see the route laid through the haze
Back of satin shirts and cotton candy in my hair

Lets run to the River bank
The scene in books we read

Lets Run to the River bank
The one we stopped to share

There's still time
There's still time

We've all the time




Baby doll let's go we'll take a car to the sleepy river like the one from your schooldays

Short-cut through the tunnel like the blind man in the park singing simple blues to the song he can't remember

They say hard times make idle different days

But don't you worry 'cause I think I've had them anyway

Lets run to the River bank
The scene in books we read

Lets Run to the River bank
The one we stopped to share

There's still time
There's still time

We've all the time




My Miss Alabama caught a shoe onto the ground said 'make the journey sweet, take me to Georgia where our sisters meet '

Tell me secrets that I know won't cost a dime
Where the sun might make off with the spells in the back of the fall

They say good times take back to younger age
But I don't listen as I'm told I had them yesterday


Lets run to the River bank
The scene in books we read

Lets Run to the River bank
The one we stopped to share

There's still time
There's still time

We've all the time




Henry met us at the gasoline store
His charm was countered by the dogs and cheap champagne

Hundred miles and a store into the back
Must've been sleeping when we took on gramps and blushin' sue

Sue she left us with a dozen red roses and a marionette from her daughters' arms

Told us not to worry, 'take the road into the stars' now she sings songs about how the West was won

They say these times can call for better minds
But I don't worry 'cause I still got Jesus on my side

Lets run to the River bank
The scene in books we read

Lets Run to the River bank
The one we stopped to share

There's still time
There's still time

We've all the time





Joy knows the freeway sticks a thumb out for a ride, I sit and wait for Alabama and her secret shame

In the end I think she died in 'sixty-three me and Joy kept-a-waiting 'til the Stars came out to play

They say some times its easier to hide
But not this morning 'cause I think I got another ride

Lets run to the River bank
The scene in books we read

Lets Run to the River bank
The one we stopped to share

Lets run to the River bank
The scene in books we read

Lets Run to the River bank
I hope I'll meet you there

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Londonslights Comment by: Londonslights - 2007-02-22 03:02
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Thanks , its actually a song I wrote about a time i was staying in a run-down hostel and ran out of money so had to hitch a ride from Milan to Munich. It was freezing cold and wet and I couldnt speak the language and it was a 9 hour trip so i just imagined that I was on my way to meet a girl i know in Georgia to lift my spirits. Everyone who came into the car i gave a name to as i didn't know who they were. An old man became 'Gramps' 'blushin Sue was a woman in a trouser suit who looked too well-off to be hitching in a minibus. Miss Alabama was a pretty girl in heels and so on. The river represents my friend in Georgia and the repetition is basically the hopelessness of the situation, we dont get to the river because its a dream, its never going to happen, however much we think it and want it.
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2007-02-21 17:46
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I loved the opening of this lyrical River Bank theme. It had a very chilhood nostalgic feel to it. I love the mention of santin shirts and cotton candy in my hair. That it really gave it a soft fresh vibrant tone. I do like the repetition of the the riverbank after each story because it's what's going on in the writer's head as his recounting childhood memories. I do agree that after a while, you kinda wonder how long it's going to go on for, so maybe just less repetitions of Let's Run To The River Bank, at any rate I did enjoy the rhythm and the lyrics that give it a Georgian/Alabama feel to it.
Thanks for sharing.
nlinde Comment by: nlinde - 2007-02-21 07:17
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This seems very song-lyricy. I'm not saying that's a bad thing, but the repetition of words in song have a groove and a trance to them. In poetry I find myself reading them over in the same tone of voice and it takes away from the power of the line itself. When I read the first line I was hooked, but by the end I found myself screaming "I get it, the river bank, we're going!" and fought the urge to type "are we there yet!?"
The lines are powerful and you have a good feel, it just could use a little cleaning up. Good Start,
nl
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