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nlinde
Nick Linde
United States, Nebraska, Lincoln

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The First Goodbye

Her face appeared to be broken
from age old concrete.
A life that spanned generations
reduced to a plastic bag
slowly dripping lunch in
the form of liquid memories,
each splash, each breath,
taking one more sepia image away.

Her lucid glare moved without effort
from the monitored hourglass
to a tilted frame hanging on the wall.
Her eyes met a younger shell of herself,
the stare seemed to dissect a dimension
only known to the half-living.
Each breath excruciating, as a slow
deliberated move in a chess match.

Her ice blue eyes, oddly clashing
with her ghostly skin, close tensely
as she parts her lips and lays
her hands, palm down, onto the pillow top
mattress. Awaking again only
to blow the image of herself one last
kiss before exhaling and watching
the last drop fall from the tube.

Checkmate.

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alexthegreat Comment by: alexthegreat - 2007-07-27 08:40
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I must admit, the flow was excellent but the description was the best. There is nothing else I can say for the poem speaks for itself.
Comment by: - 2007-05-03 11:12
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that was one of the most powerful pieces i've ever read. brilliant illustration of human condition and the inevadable facing of age. very impressed with your style. this was a genius way to use the game of chess for the illustration--primarily the parallel of death and checkmate. well done. Awesome poetry.
Jane Bowyer Comment by: Jane Bowyer - 2007-03-22 02:41
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A touching and power poem. Beautifully written with a nice flow.
GrkGrl Comment by: GrkGrl - 2007-03-14 11:58
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i agree with jewels in that the poem faded to quiet towards the end...quite clever if that was intentional....and i found the lines:
"the stare seemed to dissect a dimension
only known to the half-living."
strong and in your face....nice job nick....gg
Jewels Comment by: Jewels - 2007-03-08 10:38
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really powerful poem. the rhythm too moves in a way that feels like shortness of breath.
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