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lornawelsh
Lorna Welsh
United Kingdom, Brighton

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Dumb Friesian

(How your colour changes)



I graze on your words

The juice leaves a mark

A grass stain.

Chewing over the nouns

Forms a thick cud,

Holding my tongue,

Indelibly dying

The surface of my teeth.

Punctuated spaces

I swallow

Augment the pallor

Of my oesophagus.

Digesting each stanza, four times

Permitting each, time to swell,

Ferment,

Into intoxicating liquor.

I absorb each letter

In my blood

Pigment, oxidised

From green to read.

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normal jeane Comment by: normal jeane - 2007-05-17 19:30
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excellent last line!! I am a sucker for good word play and you did a fabulous job. Your descriptions are very good, and your word choices could not be finer. congrats on another entertaining piece!!

NJ
yowazup13 Comment by: yowazup13 - 2007-02-28 20:27
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Good comparison....I think I'll go chew on a book
Ethgar Comment by: Ethgar - 2007-02-28 07:17
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I really like this poemâ?¦ especially those last lines and the play on words with read ~ red. Nicely done!
Rpboyd Comment by: Rpboyd - 2007-02-26 16:23
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I like the beat of this poem. Excellent write.
Glen aka FAD Comment by: Glen aka FAD - 2007-02-24 17:21
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The flow would have been better with misspeled words and commas redirected, but all in all a good write. Glen aka FAD
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