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inviscera
Stevie Gray
United Kingdom, Oxfordshire, Banbury

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Sacred Heart

They wanted me on my knees,
but it was you I knelt for.
They offered me the body of Christ,
but instead I wanted yours,
finding that it sated and sanctified me more.
They told me about the One True Love,
and I thought I'd found it,
but it wasn't the one they meant.
They taught me of His suffering on the cross,
and I pictured you, laying back smiling
and crucified on a bed of daisies and dirt.
They wove a crown of thorns
and you mocked them
by wearing it at a jaunty angle.
They spoke of miracles
and I remembered the wonders you'd wrought
on my inexperienced flesh:
water into wine did not impress me,
and neither could slake my thirst as you could.
They made me learn the words of prayers I didn't mean
when all I wanted on my tongue
was you.
They talked about Heaven,
and I replied that I'd already been there.
They propagated shame,
but I could see you, radiant in your nakedness,
and I knew they were lying.
They damned
and you redeemed.
They brainwashed
and you gave back identity.
They demanded my faith.
In you,
I found something I could believe in.

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Comment by: - 2007-03-01 11:54
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I was raised Catholic so this gave me some powerful images. I love some of your descriptions. The mood is fantastic.
roger briggs Comment by: roger briggs - 2007-02-25 09:15
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A very youthful crush used to deconstruct the matters of religious and physical passion in a rather simplistic way. You've done in plainspeak here what other writers do in long critical essays.
ThatGirl Comment by: ThatGirl - 2007-02-24 14:21
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It's youth summed up in the most beautiful way.
jocelyn77 Comment by: jocelyn77 - 2007-02-23 10:16
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I thought that the simplicity of the piece was wonderful ... they ... and you ... they ... and you ...
I also really enjoyed the imagery. It took me a few lines to start getting into the piece. I started picking it up at : They taught me of His suffering on the cross,"
I actually thought this was a beautiful poem, the only thing I have to comment on is maybe going back and looking at the beginning ...

peace.love.respect.
christskorb11 Comment by: christskorb11 - 2007-02-23 08:34
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A radically sad piece of literature. I wouldnt rip this piece to pieces, but wont refrain to say your speakers got an aweful lot invested into someone who cant save even there own soul, let alone there lovers. Romantic! Its the modern or should I say, Post-Modern perspective on romance. People truley seek a savior in a mate. Futility is the inevitable end of such a venture. True love Holds a more accurate perspective, This is Lust in all rebellious degree.
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