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Comment by: marta - 2005-12-20 07:00
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| Thank you again. I have not really read Mourning for awhile. The poem Mourning is a feeling. After thinking about how I felt when I wrote it I decided to keep "sunset nights" because I use "sunset" as when something is coming to an end not as when the sun sets. |
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Comment by: marta - 2005-12-20 06:35
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| Thank you and yes I will change "sunsets nights" to "from sunsets to nights" however, I will leave "spend" since it is a never ending memory. |
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| I agree with Andrew...you may consider using Spent in place of Spend, because you are talking about moments that happened in the past. I thought this poem was OK, but it was too short and didn't deliver as well as I was hoping it might |
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Comment by: - 2005-12-16 07:42
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| Yes, I like this too. Couple of things, though. Would it be better as "spent"? And what are "sunset nights"? Not a clear image for me. |
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| I love poems like this!!! Simple yet they say so much. I also like the play-on-words with your title ("mourning" & "morning"). I just love this. |
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