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Writer's-mush

Folgers on my desk.
Typing, typing,
my thoughts, prayers, dreams.
Craving pain, happiness, and words to
bellow from my soul.
Screaming for someone to catch them in the wind.
Shine down upon me.
Shower with your light.
Writing, writing
nameless faces,
from unknown forces,
of which brought this peace to me.
Marlboros on my desk,
calling out for my lungs
to embrace them.
As I wish, my thoughts once were.
Hear me NOW!
Pounding words,
revolve in my head.
Unnecessary knowledge that consumes
my intelligence.
Eating, drinking my heart,
my mind,
turns to mush.
Penciling, penciling everything down.
Pictures on my desk,
watching my every move.
Confusing it may seem,
although I find clarity,
when I reach for a cigarette and that one cup of coffee.

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howl1940 Comment by: howl1940 - 2006-01-19 02:40
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A well-restrained use of language, a disciplined piece on the frustrations of the creative process. Deceptively well structured. Moments of mantra, moments of hymn. A cathartic piece.

Gary
Comment by: - 2005-12-17 14:25
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your frustrations really show in the language that you use, it sings with the intensity of your emotion.
Comment by: - 2005-12-16 07:49
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With 'Folgers' I was referring to, Folgers coffee. I know it's kind of hard to get, thanks for all your comments.
Comment by: - 2005-12-16 06:49
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i dont know too much about poems but this was realy good piece of writing and i can definatly relate
colindardis Comment by: colindardis - 2005-12-16 04:38
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Not too much what 'folgers' are! I guess you probably meant 'folders'? The lines 'Marlboros on my desk,
calling out for my lungs to embrace them' are the best part of this piece. I think 'writers' in the title should also have an apostrophe? I'm not too much what to make of this: the images seem unconnected in places and the speaker's attention meandering. Obviously that's the state of mind you are trying to represent, so it is very different to adequate display that in a poem and not let the focus of the piece suffer as well.
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