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Secrets
Diva of Secrets
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The way you look at me

Written as a song

I will try to pause it out so you can kind of get the melody


When you look at me... (slow)
the way you look at me... (slow)

you break the chains (fast)
that bound
and bind me....(hold)

you set me free...(slow)
break the lock and key...(slow)
to let me know that (fast)
you want me. (Hold)

In your arms I hide...(slow)
safe by your side...(slow)
you hold me near...slow)
as star dust flies... (hold)

then you look at me...(slow)
the way you look at me...(slow)
when you look at me

You hold my hand in yours...(slow)
as we walk side by side...(slow)
down the street (hold )where
love has died..(Hold)

Then you pick me up (fast)
so my toes don't touch
the stones of (Hold)
sad lovers luck (Hold)

then you look at me...(Slow)
the way you look at me...(Slow)
When you look at me

When your lips brush mine..(slow)
my heart jumps a pace (Hold)
and with your mouth on mine (hold)
I let you see (hold)

the way you look at me (hold)
when you look at me (Hold)
because you love me (Slow) (Hold)

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Comment by: - 2007-03-09 04:11
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Do you have any music to accompany this?
Glen aka FAD Comment by: Glen aka FAD - 2007-03-03 09:58
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Flows very well, like the words. Glen aka FAD...
christskorb11 Comment by: christskorb11 - 2007-03-02 19:32
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I love romance, I pine for it, I breath it and would live upon it. This is romance and a lovely song. Ive personally only written one romance song and for an ex love, who at the time wasnt an ex.I sure loved her!
Comment by: - 2007-02-28 20:03
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Then you pick me up (fast)
so my toes donā??t touch --- these are the only lines I dont understand. I'm trying to picture your toes not touching each other when perhaps you meant touching the floor? I dunno.

I can almost hear this as a song in my mind. Maybe someday it will be. Keep up the lyric writing I think you're good at it.

Best Wishes, Jenn
tessae Comment by: tessae - 2007-02-28 11:02
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I think this would work good as a song. The words are a little repetitive for a poem, but as a song I think it works okay. Good job, I like this!
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