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TequilaTwilight
Mercedes Dawson
United Kingdom, Manchester

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Mis-timed

There was a time, a place even,
but there was never a moment.

The moment died in the turning of a hand,
the wiping of a face, and the darkening of a day.
The era that spanned a palm with lines of misfortune
trailed itself across a brow to furrow, a mouth to frown,
found itself pocketed in the recess of a mind forgot.
Lodged in the pages of memory, written by a thought
that took flight with itself, everything etched itself deep,
ripped itself into pages gone, never a text to be studied.
What passing phase and turn of the earth took itself away?
Before a blink had blinked the century proudly strayed on
and left all ideas of aspiring this to fall in the 'if onlys'.
Now i cannot put my foot forward to step onto this path,
but tilts limp and motionless, a reminder of a nothing
to happen which covers my days in a déjà vu I cannot place

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digitalcannibal Comment by: digitalcannibal - 2007-03-02 15:27
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Absolutely wonderful.
Sophia Comment by: Sophia - 2007-03-02 05:43
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Well, I think this is great. I have read quite a bit of your stuff now and really like the way you write. These lines are strong:

The era that spanned a palm with lines of misfortune
trailed itself across a brow to furrow, a mouth to frown,
found itself pocketed in the recess of a mind forgot.

and there are lots of others I could pick out too. I'm not sure this needs the first two lines though, but I'll have to read it again a few times to be sure about that.

Well written and I'm bookshelving it!
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