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Trusting words
It's about the interconnectedness of things:
that this is a giant body
underneath the earth
that you and I fit in
like a jigsaw of gnarled wood
like a root
like ginseng growing
you and I are all one people:
no nuclear bomb
no war no pain no insensitive action
is not felt at this heart of things
by the earthbodymind, always, throughout time:
so if you do not exactly trust my words
you will
feel them
and it is better that
if you do not exactly trust my words
you do
think about them:
we are not born alone,
neither, through aloneness growing,
to die despite
this whole:
so if you do not exactly trust my words,
whose words are these,
or,
who is the sound
you speak?
mother and brother and sister of mine,
be borne
into a new knowledge.
JJ May, 1986
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Hi Sheri,
Thanks for your really useful comments - you always make such good suggestions. I agree the first 'and' & second 'and that' can be removed and have done so. But re. the word 'this' in 'this heart of things', no, that's important, because the 'this' is about the jigsaw of gnarled wood, this giant body, the interconnectedness of things, so it's not just 'the heart of things' it's 'this heart of things', this nowness, this reality. Yes, the suggestions did help and thanks so much. J x |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-04-28 03:21
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I really like the message of this piece.
Trusting someone becomes harder and harder each day.
A few suggestions:
and that you and I fit in
--I think you could take out the first "and"--
"that you and I fit it"
and that you and I are all one people:
--"you and I are all one people"
is not felt at this heart of things
--"is not felt at the heart of things"--
Hope the suggestions help.
Sheri** |
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